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These   sentences   will   be  coherent

even  if   I  am not  always.   You  will

find them elsewhere;  perhaps hidden    

amongst   my  eyelashes.   Shadowed

away  like  those  forgotten  diaries  I

leave  beneath  my  bed  and  in  your

arms.  The form poems take amongst

my  heart like a nest  made of  cotton

and wool  and your arms again.   The

pages  of  every  diary I have  written

are woven throughout   my  nest now

and it doesn’t matter if I find  a  page  

of sorrow.   I  get to be  happy today.

It’s  my  turn.   And  these  sentences

will  be  coherent.   Even if I am  not,

they will still  be smoothing hands  to  

my  brow and your  knee  and  I  will

take the broom  and sweep their  still

articulate  shapes  into  your  nest  of

arms  and  old  disjointed tears.   The

latter are mine.  Oh?  I pray for more

time   to   make  my  new   sentences.

They will end  up  just  as the nest  of  

letters I forgot about. Shadowed  into   

my  eyelashes   and  just  as  illogical   

as my thoughts are now.

                                         It’s my turn

**
©2006-2010 ~illixim
:iconillixim:

Author's Comments

to be happy


The form is not meant to be read in a disjointed way, you're supposed to follow it like prose. I only wanted it stretched out, I'm not sure why. It felt more... I don't know. More how I wanted it to feel.

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:iconwinterfang:
It's nice. I like the column idea of it, and how it's straight down both sides, except for the offset of the last line. Visually, it looks good, and it reads well, too.

--
"This isn't a hobby, this is a disorder."
:iconriverwolf:
i love the shape it grabs the reader.
:iconshadowedacolyte:
I do like the columnular, newspaper-tabbed look of it. You repeat yourself a few times, but I think it's a coherent choice that doesn't take too much away. All in all, it's an honest expression of emotion, even though a few of the images aren't entirely fresh ("forgotten diaries" would be better without the "forgotten", things like that).
:iconillixim:
:heart: thanks. <.< sadly it'll be hard to edit this one without screwing with the spacing.. it took me forever to get it right hahah.
:iconparanoidschizo:
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I'm perfectly happy with who I am. It's who everyone else is that depresses me.

"You can safely assume that you've created God in your own image when it turns out that God hates all the same people you do." - Anne Lamott
:iconbrassylion:
beautiful form
kinda reminded me of JENGA!

--
True Fact: In Ireland, poets dont have to pay income tax. Why?, you ask. Because Ireland is just that sweet
:iconillixim:
:giggle: Jengaaa!

Thanks babe. ^.^

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